Posted by Rico On 05.24 7 komentar

My unforgettable moment

When I become student of Senior High School that is the first time I bring motorbike. Because previously I study in Jakarta so i dont know areas in Surabaya though Elementary School and Junior High School its in Surabaya. I study in Jakarta only 1 week and hereinafter in Surabaya that is Barunawati Senior High School.


First time ride motorbike I walk very slow and beware of because I dont know street go to there, more than anything else vehicle passing that area very plenty and majority most truck. But after a few time I have started to memorize street go to there. Because have memorized I drive motorbike swiftly.


At one particular day rain fall very rapid and I cant see anything, because hour have show at 12.30 I’m ride very quickly. Dont be suspected in front of me there is a truck and I try to avoid, but because slippery road i slip and bump pavement. I dont feel painfulness at my body and I try to wake up and searching my motor, not for a long time many people come stand uping around me hereinafter I dont know again what is going on.


When I am conciousness I have resided in hospital and I feel painfulness many " mend" in some part of my body. Part of foot, my hand and head there are some stitching. And in the reality I have unconscious during 2 day. I’m so confuse with this tragedy because my parent do not know what happen to me, and I very fear to inform them. But hospital have phoned them and finally its noon of them come. I still shock with that occurence, till now I still rather fear to pass the area!

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  1. nadhira says:
    24 Mei 2009 pukul 23.04

    i think your paragraph is hard to understand...


    i found many mistakes, especially about grammar..

    such as : "When I become" should be " when i became" and the other sentences..

    i hpe you can do better on next project

  2. cHuBbY_LuChUu says:
    25 Mei 2009 pukul 23.35

    your writing is order,.

    but,.you still make mistakes in grammar,.

    elok 120810486G

  3. aisyah says:
    25 Mei 2009 pukul 23.57

    I think your paragraph is good enough..

    But you must attention about comma (,) and fullstop (.) in your paragraph...

    and you can edit subject with capital word
    "so i dont know areas in Surabaya"

  4. Karina says:
    26 Mei 2009 pukul 03.08

    Hi....RiCo...

    your paragraph is good enough,,and quite focus....

    and your writing is good,,maybe there are some mistake,,but it's not problem....

    that's all my comment,,i'll wait for your comment in my blog,,

    thank's...:)

  5. Princess Pinkz says:
    26 Mei 2009 pukul 03.53

    wildania(120810477G)

    i think your paragraph is good enough,,,

    but there are some mistake on your writing,,in grammar,tenses, and vocab.....

    but,, so far your writing is good,,,u tried to make a good paragraph,,and it's understand to read....

  6. Febrina a.k.a Berroy says:
    26 Mei 2009 pukul 07.11

    heii rico ..

    i think your paragraph is good enough ..

    but you didn't use simple past in your paragraph ..

    that's all ..

  7. Kurnia Suci says:
    26 Mei 2009 pukul 07.16

    hay coco..

    your paragraph is good for me
    and i still find some mistake in your writing...

    but so far so good..


    kurnia (120810488G)

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